Suicide and Coffee – Poetry

Suicide and Coffee

My friend tells me that each morning
she awakens with suicide and coffee
on her mind, and then she has a smoke

I want to tell her how my mind
entirely bypasses the coffee
how suicide is the first thought
second thought, all day and night thought

I want to tell her that if I must stay
a simple razor blade will do
crisscrossing over old scars, gashes
just deep enough to bleed out the pain
or awaken the senses and escape numbness

How I want to see my blood trickling
down, down, down
my thighs or arms like red rivers
creating their own pathway
through my white valleys of flesh

But instead, I sit silently, coffee in hand
swallowing her pain as I stifle my own.

ยฉ2011 Lori Carlson. All Rights Reserved.

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52 thoughts on “Suicide and Coffee – Poetry

  1. mmaaytah says:

    Hello, just stumbled upon this touching and truly relatable poem. Well done!

  2. Mary Sukala says:

    Seriously gorgeous work. I love darker poetry and I can definitely relate to this one on a personal level. I love your voice. I think that’s part of what made the poem so striking. And reading up on some of the other comments talking about Ms. Plath, I must say she is my all-time poet and I don’t think anyone could read her work without taking a small snippet of her flair back into their own poetry.

    https://confessionalistbooth.wordpress.com/

    • Lori Carlson says:

      Thank you so much, Mary. Yes, Sylvia Plath has had an influence on my work, but all of the Confessional poets have. I mostly studied them in college and their flair has filtered into my own work. Thanks again for stopping by. I will check out your blog as well ๐Ÿ™‚

      • Mary Sukala says:

        You’re very welcome. As you could probably see on my blog, the Confessional movement of poetry his hands down my favorite one. I love the edge and the wryness and honesty of that group of wordsmiths. And thank you so much for checking out my blog and following and reblogging “Confessionalist.” I really appreciate it.

      • Lori Carlson says:

        Oh yes, I can definitely see their influence in your work. And you are most welcome ๐Ÿ™‚ I hope it brings you some readers and comments ๐Ÿ™‚

  3. I’m so sorry you lived in this world of distress. I am in it. It is very hard. Beautifully written and expressed.

  4. This is so powerful & a lesson to all of us that we don’t always know what’s going on in other people’s lives. Keep writing & thank you for sharing this.

  5. calmkate says:

    Hi Sunshine haven’t heard from you in ages so I am getting worried – please email me if you feel like talking? Otherwise hide under that doona and take care, you are precious …

  6. LeTaraWrites says:

    This is painful, but beautifully written. This is the type of poem that can definitely be felt.

  7. So vivid. Hope you dont steep too long

  8. This is amazing. ๐Ÿ™‚

  9. Laura says:

    Wow… deeply moving. I can relate to this so much.

  10. Drink coffee with the part of your pain you swallow like taking a tablet ๐Ÿ˜ฆ

    So true what shared in this poem ๐Ÿ™‚

  11. Wonderful. How you have draped a very powerful message and emotional turmoil in poetic simplicity. I once wrote a poem about a man contemplating suicide….it’s on my blog….the poem is ‘Sign Out’ ….would be glad to have your opinion on it. Being a doctor, I see quite a few suicides in our medical colleges in India. Again, a remarkable poem….thanks for the same…

  12. crystalcolumz says:

    Well, that was fun

  13. calmkate says:

    Evocative, real and powerful – glad you have worked through the worst of this!

  14. From a fellow coffee addict-the smell off the top in the first 20 minutes of the morning! Thanks for the poem-another translucent raindrop! We are not allowed to hurt ourselves even from pain…We live for others, like your coffee friend. For just ourselves it may be 50/50, or all the same…But Who would open the cat food can? Like Bob Cratchet and tiny Tim, who would be there if Ebineezer’d not have been? An eternity gone before, and so a long time to come, this brief between, we have to endure, for others if not us, at the price, if possible, of pain.

    “For God made man in his image” is the reason we should not even hurt, let alone off ourselves, if at all possible. And it is good too not only for itself, but what comes out of it, as, Oh, the colors of the garden in the morning sunlight’s rain, honey for coffee from our friends, and the folks and words again…

    Peace/Love
    MM

  15. calensariel says:

    “But instead, I sit silently, coffee in hand
    swallowing her pain as I stifle my own.”

    You know that sentence covers a whole lot of other pain, too. It makes me sad.

  16. Lori, I am sorry I cannot like this. Your post definitely tugged at my heart. I’m so sorry a feeling like this is an every morning thing with coffee. ๐Ÿ˜ฆ keep drinking the coffee! I wish so much this was fiction, but when I read it, I feel the emotion it was meant to evoke. You write very well. Don’t forget that. Jack wouldn’t want you to give up, and neither do your readers! ๐Ÿ˜Š Sending positive thoughts your way!! Are you working on another story with Jack?…this brunette is just a tiny bit interested, nothing major! ๐Ÿ˜‰ LOL! Hope that made you laugh and have a great day! ๐Ÿ˜€

    • Lori Carlson says:

      Thanks hun… this is an older poem, back when I was still struggling with my mental illness… thankfully, I am no longer suicidal. I still have my dark moments, but not even cutting holds interest for me anymore.
      Funny you should mention Jack.. yes, I will be working on a new story with him and the gang next month. I gave a hint of what’s to come in this piece of a story: https://promptlywritten.wordpress.com/2016/05/14/raised-stakes-flash-fiction/
      I hope you will stay tuned. The story will take place here on A Whispered Wind throughout June ๐Ÿ™‚
      And thank you! It did make me laugh and smile.. have a wonderful week ahead!

      • You are very welcome, Lori! I am so glad to learn this was from a while ago! I’m sorry you went through such a rough time. I am happy to know you are better now! ๐Ÿ˜€ this is wonderful news about Jack! ๐Ÿ˜Š So excited for June! I’ll tune in every week, for sure! Thank you for the link in your comment! I read it and it has me in suspense! Loved it!! ๐Ÿ˜€ it sort of reminds me of the opening scenes of Shutter Island. Jack will save Dani …if need be. He is the heroine! ๐Ÿ˜Š beautiful women don’t cause any trouble! ๐Ÿ˜‰ looking forward to the next part of this lovely series, Lori!! ๐Ÿ˜€

      • Lori Carlson says:

        Thanks hun.. and I am so happy to hear you are excited about more of Jack’s story… I am excited to be writing about him again ๐Ÿ˜€

      • You are very welcome, Lori! So happy you are continuing his story! Counting down the days!! ๐Ÿ˜Š

  17. BarbCT says:

    Both scary and sad.

  18. This one got to me. So well written and with such emotion. Keep drinking the coffee.

  19. I hear Sylvia Plath in those words. Stick to the coffee and the company of good friends.

  20. joey says:

    Coffee is definitely medicine, Lori. *hugs*

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